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Shadow · 1 unfinished Wed Feb 04, 2009 4:35 pm

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i cant really seem to finish this one, ive been workin on an ending for about a week, so im just leaving it as is. if you think you have a way to finish it id be greatly appreciative Smile

Insanity
Calamity
How could this be
Everything was perfect...

Trial after trial
Impatient for justification
Unaware
Even as its so obvious
We are oblivious

Purity
Awakened, aggravated
Infuriation at its greatest
Lightning strikes upon the meek

i think i should remove the lightning strikes part but it seems to fit well in my head
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schwizzboy · 2 Re: unfinished Wed Feb 04, 2009 4:39 pm

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do you go to like poetry readings? open mic night?

Shadow · 3 Re: unfinished Wed Feb 04, 2009 4:52 pm

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no i generally do most of my work in school when im bored, none of that stuff.

FRoG · 4 Re: unfinished Wed Feb 04, 2009 6:05 pm

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Insanity
Calamity
How could this be
Everything was perfect...

Trial after trial
Impatient for justification
Unaware
Even as its so obvious
We are oblivious

Purity
Awakened, aggravated
Infuriation at its greatest
Lightning strikes upon the meek

edit: stongest i've ever been,
defend,
just to destroy the weak.

i dunno, tell me what you think

Shadow · 5 Re: unfinished Wed Feb 04, 2009 6:15 pm

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mm like it all but weak, maybe

strongest ive ever been,
defend,
just to save the ignorant
the pitiful
the fools upon fools
lost in their own corrupt world
death to them! the devil shouts
i stand up
rise above
object to the heavens
how may the gods let us do this
how do they have the right
how must we be
to survive in this manifestation
this hell
this place we call home

so itd end up being

Shad0w wrote:

Home:

Insanity
Calamity
How could this be
Everything was perfect...

Trial after trial
Impatient for justification
Unaware
Even as its so obvious
We are oblivious

Purity
Awakened, aggravated
Infuriation at its greatest
Lightning strikes upon the meek

Strongest I've ever been,
Defend,
Just to save the ignorant
The pitiful

The fools upon fools
Lost in their own corrupt world
Death to them!
The devil shouts

I stand up
Rise above
Object to the heavens

How may the gods let us do this?
How do they have the right?
How must we be?
How must we live?

To survive in this manifestation
This hell
This place we call home.

Thanks for the inspiration frog, the way you wrote that line made me think of ways to branch it off Smile

FRoG · 6 Re: unfinished Thu Feb 05, 2009 11:48 am

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Thanks for the inspiration frog, the way you wrote that line made me think of ways to branch it off

np, man, that is what im good at, inspiration.. I'm just thankful im not the only one now sharing my thoughts and feelings, and since tool departed this writers haven, it seems kinda dry. well, thanks for posting friend.

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FRoG · 7 Re: unfinished Thu Feb 05, 2009 2:19 pm

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"To survive in this manifestation
This hell
This place we call home. "

When will home be a place of peace?
re-inviting our dreams, is our only defeat...

just seeing what you can do with this.. hf!

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Shadow

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Shadow

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FRoG

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Shadow

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FRoG

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FRoG

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